Create and Describe A Planet Writing Task

Create and Describe Your Own Planet -

Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my writing interesting
and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing interesting
and engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic-specific words to include in my
writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a descriptive piece of writing to
promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move to your planet. You want your
writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie. Click here to get to
video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it successful and look at how to
plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete your piece of writing. Remember to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and edit
(does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self
and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

Jupra 1087

One day a space shuttle with only one crewman called Nathan Johnson left on board (the rest had died)
discovered a new planet in the Tree Trunk Star System called Jupra 1087, 57.38 miriona (million) light
years away from our solar system but he died as soon as he saw it from old age.

To get there you have to go in a special coma to survive because it takes so long to get there. It takes about
79 years so it is hard to survive on the way. The space shuttle can only be put on autopilot because you
need an experienced pilot but they would die because they would need to be at least 40 years old.

There are many different types of animals and creatures that have different names like Euroyeet that
looks like a tiger mixed with an ape. There are also many more animals like the Rhinoksoursee and
the Hedgebanger. The atmosphere on Jupra 1087 is just enough oxygen for the animals and creatures
to survive but humans need special space suits that are available for purchase at Do Duck In Bakery
for $12.70. People got all this information from going there and coming back to Earth (although most
people stay there because it is beautiful) and telling everyone about it but only I believed them, everyone
else thought it was made up.Jupra 1087 looks like a ātaahua (beautiful) planet with mostly crystal clear
wai (water) and massive

rainforests and lush green grass fields. There are many beaches across all the coasts of the islands.
The sand at the beaches is softer than anything on Earth. It is about 10 times as soft as the softest pillow.

People should go there because it has got awesome caves and nice places to stay. It is the best holiday
place in the universe but it is very expensive to go there. People that go there get a good education
because they have brilliant schools but it is hard to understand people sometimes because of the space suits.

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The End

By Nathan J.

Best Part of Me

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to think carefully about the words I use so that my writing is descriptive and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to add an appropriate visual to my work

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing interesting and engaging (smile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some interesting words to include in my writing

-I have some descriptive words in my writing (adjectives)

-I have added a photo to my writing

-I have included Te Reo Māori words.

MY 👃IHU (nose)👃

I like my ihu (nose) because it can smell my favourite food. My nose is soft like a pillow. The freckles on my nose are speckles everywhere. It gets creases when I am angry. It goes as red as a tomato when I am cold. My nose fits perfectly on my face. I like to call my ihu (nose) the ‘naughty 👃nosy👃 neighbour’. I like to use my nose to meet people at a marae with a hongi. I like to rub my nose on my soft cat. I like to touch my nose on a cold surface. I like to use my ihu (nose) to do funny things.

Holiday Home Learning Writing

For our holiday home learning we had to write a piece of writing about something in the holidays. Here is my work.

Click here to open my work.

Rocky Shore Learning Goals

Here are our learning intentions for the rocky shore unit we did this term. I have highlighted green the goals I think I met.

Swim Safe Achievement Levels

WALT: achieve our swimming goals and be safe in the water.
Highlighted green are the swimming goals I've met so far.

The Red Beadlet Anemone Information Report

Learning Intentions for Science We are learning to understand that all living creatures have a life cycle. We are learning that living creatures have bodies that are designed to help them to live and survive.   We are learning that all living things are designed to live in a particular environment. We are learning to understand how food webs work. We are learning that in an ecosystem all living things and their environment are interconnected. We are learning to understand about the Rocky Shore and the impact, both positive and negative, we can have on this environment.

Literacy As part of our rocky shore unit we will also use our literacy skills to read and learn about the rocky shore and to write an information report on a rocky shore creature. Writing We are learning to write an information report about an animal. We are learning to use our writing skills across the curriculum.

Rocky Shore Recount

Learning Intentions for Science We are learning to understand that all living creatures have a life cycle. We are learning that living creatures have bodies that are designed to help them to live and survive.   We are learning that all living things are designed to live in a particular environment. We are learning to understand how food webs work. We are learning that in an ecosystem all living things and their environment are interconnected. We are learning to understand about the Rocky Shore and the impact, both positive and negative, we can have on this environment.

Literacy As part of our rocky shore unit we will also use our literacy skills to read and learn about the rocky shore and to write an information report on a rocky shore creature. Writing We are learning to write an information report about an animal. We are learning to use our writing skills across the curriculum.